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globex · Unread post by **globex** » Wed Oct 19, 2005 5:05 pm

Hey,

I wrote this tune a few days ago. I don't have fancy recording equiptment yet, so I used a digital tape deck. Opinions and suggestions are always welcome. (by the way, I'm not a singer, and it shows)

http://www.globexdesigns.com/misc/globe ... ockets.mp3
(Click to play using internal plugin, or right click and choose save target as...)

Enjoy!

-globex

Sciaracastro · Unread post by **Sciaracastro** » Wed Oct 19, 2005 5:27 pm

i liked it
during the intro sounds like u arent picking the notes well enough

jellyfish · Unread post by **jellyfish** » Wed Oct 19, 2005 5:40 pm

Intro a little rough but I got the gist.
Verse/Bridge has a cool progression.
Chorus was decent, nothing special. [where it should be the hook

]
Your voice has potential to be Mrazish.
Sing a bit louder next time.

Overall, its got great potential!!!!

Good job.

globex · Unread post by **globex** » Wed Oct 19, 2005 5:45 pm

Thanks guys.

What you thought was the bridge is actually my chorus/hook. What you thought was the chorus, is my bridge/switch.

I played it for a few friends, and they liked it. They were all girls though, so I guess that's why. :lol:

And yah the intro is a real pain, cause the Capo is on 6 and the intro has notes on like the 16th fret

-globex

jellyfish · Unread post by **jellyfish** » Wed Oct 19, 2005 6:22 pm

globex wrote:Thanks guys.

What you thought was the bridge is actually my chorus/hook. What you thought was the chorus, is my bridge/switch.

I played it for a few friends, and they liked it. They were all girls though, so I guess that's why.

And yah the intro is a real pain, cause the Capo is on 6 and the intro has notes on like the 16th fret

-globex

No, your verse & chorus are all the same. I said bridge because you weren't singing during it, which really doesn't make it a bridge but it could have worked

mangold · Unread post by **mangold** » Thu Oct 20, 2005 3:28 pm

a little sketchy and catchy. got potential, but needs refinement.

the lyrics ara a bit too hippie random for me, but not bad. please keep postin

Appfro · Unread post by **Appfro** » Thu Oct 20, 2005 3:55 pm

i like the intro if you get it down a bit more and make it a bit smoother.

the verse has a good progression, but i agree w/ jason that your chorus isn't anything special. it sounds more like a pre-chorus. you should maybe think of breaking out a hook after that part and making it your chorus.

you not the worse singer i've heard here by far so don't say you're not a singer. you just need to work on it a bit. sing more from your diaphragm instead of just barely letting it squeak out.

crandog74 · Unread post by **crandog74** » Thu Oct 20, 2005 10:09 pm

i think the song sounds really solid. the recording itself could probably be a little better, but the song is great. with the mixing, i would try and bring out your voice a little more, the guitar is drowning it out a little.

awesome job!

globex · Unread post by **globex** » Fri Oct 21, 2005 1:30 am

Thanks everyone, I'll definatly continue working on my singing.

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