*****The Ultimate Original Song Competition II*****

smedley · Unread post by **smedley** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 9:26 pm

Here it is...Part II

Rules:
-Pm or email ( smedley92688@yahoo.com ) me your ratings/scores

-DO NOT POST YOUR SCORES IN THIS THREAD!! THIS THREAD IS MEANT FOR CRITIQUES ONLY!!

-You can only vote for 3 people (one gets 3 pts, one gets 2 pts, and one gets 1)

-No voting for yourselves

Scoring:
1 - 3 pts
2 - 2 pts
3 - 1 pt

If I forget anyone or if you want to join, just email/pm me/reply here your song and i'll add it to this post

The Songs:

Kenny Clark (Longleggedfrog) - The World Is Crazy
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=2VXC ... 72T19Q70QS

Micah Wetzel (Freshead16) - Road Lonely
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3J4D ... TUK86FLESM

Mitch (Appfro) - Miracle
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=1PKK ... X8IZXD17DD

Nick (Maxpower00044) - Called Again
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3QGN ... 76Z28G00WE

Rob Cranston (Crandog74) - Bob Tune
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=2X32 ... 7OPF1UBZYC

Sarah Allen (NoNotThat) - Foolish
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3TFB ... Q8LDKA3E3F

Khiem Tran (Tranman66) - Summer Nights
http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=1TS1 ... 1IJRD9C8ZY

Pat Mcinnis - Thrown
http://www.patmcinnis.com/thrown.mp3

Any problems, let me know. You all are very gifted and I wish you all luck.

Tranman66 · Unread post by **Tranman66** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 9:39 pm

is it to get the lowest or highest possible of points?

smedley · Unread post by **smedley** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 9:41 pm

highest

bighuk · Unread post by **bighuk** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 9:50 pm

Sorry for the lack of disection but i'm at work and working at the same time.

Fuck... Sorry I half ass read it while I was busy.

smedley · Unread post by **smedley** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 9:51 pm

oh, crap, i almost forgot

you can only vote for 3 people, one person gets 3, one gets 2, one gets one, sorry about that

and make sure you pm/email me your ratings so people dont get upset

Tranman66 · Unread post by **Tranman66** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 9:58 pm

Wow this is hard. Everyone is so good. Solid recordings guys. Seriously, a 3 point scale wont do justic, maybe 5 or 10 next time?

Kenny Clark:
awesome rhythm. very steady and solid. really good structure. good mixing as well. I enjoy your voice. lol, theres not much to critique

Micah Wetzel:
Soft rock huh. I like it, definitely relaxing. awesome guitaring man. your lead is very good. so many layers. I like it. The melody is not very original tho.

Mitch:
I like your low voice. I can sense your style through this song. More folky but with dave matthews style guitar. It's a little repetitive for me.

Nick:
Your voice needs a little more control and tone. the guitar seems a little sloppy at times, dont know if its the recording quality.

Rob Cranston:
Wow, definitely a radio hit. Very well done all around. I love it man.

Sarah Allen:
yes, fingerpicking, i like it. Your voice seems too weak at the begining. I sense a little too much effects on your voice. Nice tune tho.

dmbguitar718 · Unread post by **dmbguitar718** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 10:44 pm

Wait - fuck man, I haven't submitted yet. Can I have it to you before 1:00?

dmbguitar718 · Unread post by **dmbguitar718** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 11:30 pm

here's mine.

Thrown Together
http://www.patmcinnis.com/thrown.mp3

dmbguitar718 · Unread post by **dmbguitar718** » Sun Sep 18, 2005 11:41 pm

oh, a little backstory:

- old song, revamped, new parts added.
- one of my worst works (IMO)
- definitely half-assed and rushed, it's very noticeable
- i had no intentions on using my electric on this one, but i broke my g string on my acoustic yesterday, and had no replacement. so that sucks.

so yeah, i'm not happy with it, but good luck everyone!

xan. · Unread post by **xan.** » Mon Sep 19, 2005 12:57 am

dmbguitar718 wrote:oh, a little backstory:

- old song, revamped, new parts added.
- one of my worst works (IMO)
- definitely half-assed and rushed, it's very noticeable
- i had no intentions on using my electric on this one, but i broke my g string on my acoustic yesterday, and had no replacement. so that sucks.

so yeah, i'm not happy with it, but good luck everyone!

Pat... your song is great, it put me in a nice, relaxed mood. you need to have more confidence in your stuff man.

xan. · Unread post by **xan.** » Mon Sep 19, 2005 1:05 am

wow... everyone has awesome talent. i downloaded all the songs and think every song is great. i hope one day i can be able to enter one of these competitions. i do have to say Rob Cranston your song was exceptionally good. i wish i could sing like you. you kind of sound like the matchbox 20 singer but anyway i love your song, very good stuff man.

carter29 · Unread post by **carter29** » Mon Sep 19, 2005 9:45 am

when do we have to vote by?

carter29 · Unread post by **carter29** » Mon Sep 19, 2005 10:35 am

Damnit

I had like a paragraph written for each song, then the window closed with like 2 songs left, don't want to write it all again

Ill Just say they all sounded great, some needed a little excitement.

smedley · Unread post by **smedley** » Mon Sep 19, 2005 1:25 pm

we can make it the end of the month i guess (October 1st) for voting to end

dmbguitar718 · Unread post by **dmbguitar718** » Mon Sep 19, 2005 2:10 pm

I'll do mine in sections because I'm lazy and there's several songs. (I'll go backwards)

Tran - This song needs some structure man. It was also over the place. Overally, it was extremely muddy. You seem more interested in the alternate tuning/technique than what's actually being played. I mean, the Trace Bundy stuff was cool, but you just...did it. Like, it was just placed in there. You want to make it flow with the rest of the song. It was as if you played part of the song, stopped, and played a little technique-oriented stuff unrelated to the rest of the song. The stuff you played aside from that were kinda hard to listen to, it sounded really messy. (oh - metronome! use it!)

Sorry man, I don't know how else to put it.

Sarah - I've heard this one before. I like it. I think this would sound badass with better equipment.
Some things that will improve the overall quality of the song:
- those harmonics. Keep them, but you strike them too aggressively. (:40-:41)
- harmonies - use them. i think they would be much better than the doubled vocals
- i think a little second guitar addition would add alot.
I really liked that one though, nice job.

Rob - Rooooob dude, that was awesome. Congrats, you have a nice song there. It is so complete. The strings are fantastic. Did you play them? The guitar was spot on, as well as the electric additions. I really liked it. Great stuff, not sure what else to say.

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