my first original song - needs critiquing

BenPezzner · Unread post by **BenPezzner** » Sun Aug 28, 2005 1:36 am

So this is my first attempt at an original song (lyrics and all), although I haven't finished the lyrics yet. Before I do, what do you guys think? Are the drums too busy? Is the music to backgroundish? Any ideas on how to make the bridge fit? I think the meter change may be too abrupt. Any comments would be appreciated.

http://www.pezshow.com/music.html (the song should automatically play in the background - if it doesn't let me know and I'll try and post it here)

Thanks,
Ben

ps - would it be too much if I added a cello track or two? I have a problem with making things too complex

GreyBlueAnt · Unread post by **GreyBlueAnt** » Mon Aug 29, 2005 1:34 am

sounds good ben. Not sure about cello, it's pretty busy, but there are some spaces in it that have room. try it out.

btw, if Piano1 were a woman, i'd marry her.

carter29 · Unread post by **carter29** » Mon Aug 29, 2005 5:28 am

like the drums man, nice sound

what kind of drum equipment ya got?

edit: no lyrics man

captainp4 · Unread post by **captainp4** » Mon Sep 05, 2005 8:14 am

Its not playin for me Ben. I'd like to hear it if you could post it.

thanks,

i like tictacs · Unread post by **i like tictacs** » Mon Sep 05, 2005 10:00 am

carter29 wrote:
edit: no lyrics man

sooooo?

BenPezzner · Unread post by **BenPezzner** » Thu Sep 08, 2005 2:52 pm

sorry guys, my hard drive crapped out on me... I'm in the process of recovering my files.

if the song doesn't automatically play, try this:
http://www.pezshow.com/files/Original1.mp3

at some point when I'm back up and running I'll finish this

Kahn · Unread post by **Kahn** » Thu Sep 08, 2005 3:54 pm

I love it. Lyrics would make it complete.

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my first original song - needs critiquing

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