allright boys, lay it into me.
This is a quick recording, working on a new set up with garage band. but figured some of you hadn't heard me sing so I thought I'd put it out there. The song is a bit rushed on this take (which is a bit old). I'm on guitar and vocals at the same time. It was too hard and time consuming for me to do it seperately.
**probably will get rid of this stanza and replace with new verse. I do enjoy it (it's a haiku and all, however I feel it's probably a little two abstract). Ideas on the added verse would be great. As you can see the style is a bit different from story telling it's pretty much submersing oneself in the moment. I don't understand the ideas behind the placement of the chorus and the little nuances that go into make a song. Is it okay for the chorus to also be the last verse or should I intermingle it in further - or does it really matter if it sounds decent (I give this a five on a scale of one to ten) From reading the lyrics and listening to the chord progression one can tell it's pretty simple song. The snakey/steamy part is intentional and I'm learning to love the sound and play on the tree of life, the serpent, etc..
The song is also much slower now:
http://musicv2.com/artist/involution
steam
instantaneous soul spark touch
the souls of love
translucent touch
intertwine
you caught my eye
suspended me in time
it feels like the whole world
could solely exist for that
this timelessness
it's a tear to a flame
flame to a tear
it's called steam
**drip up into you
sacremental interfuse
luminate hearts view
iridescent gleam
rays of a seam
hand unflolds anew
touch the earth - renew
(get it rainbow)
original - steam
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Honestly, i really like your style, your voice, your music. However, I'd love to hear it with a good recording and good mix, but that's minor. I can see you sitting out on the front porch with a bottle of wine singing with your friends.
A word to the wise ain't necessary - it's the stupid ones that need the advice.
-Bill Cosby
-Bill Cosby
i agree the recording quality needs an uber boost, but theres something great behind that fuzz and overbass.
you have a great voice. a very good voice... it gets a tid repetitive after a while... maybe a nice breakdown thrown in there?
keep workin and keep postin
you have a great voice. a very good voice... it gets a tid repetitive after a while... maybe a nice breakdown thrown in there?
keep workin and keep postin
~Andy (The artist formerly known as praisedave)
http://www.andymangold.com
http://www.andymangold.com
thanks for the encouragment you guys. I apologize for not being around more to comment on everyone's work in here. Work and play have been keeping me busy!
andy I totally agree. I would love to have a better command of the guitar.
but good news - garage band is here! I have to drive up about an hour to use my sisters computer but I have it all dialed out and songs will be on the way.
and grey you know me to well! porch swingin' wine drinkin'...
more recordings on the way.
cheers people - to our spirits ~
andy I totally agree. I would love to have a better command of the guitar.
but good news - garage band is here! I have to drive up about an hour to use my sisters computer but I have it all dialed out and songs will be on the way.
and grey you know me to well! porch swingin' wine drinkin'...
more recordings on the way.
cheers people - to our spirits ~
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