***This New Song I Have Been Working On***

[a1075dd63aa12]

This is something I have been working, i actually came up with the breakdown I have been working for during this take kind of spontaneously, give it a listen and shoot me some feedback if you will

thanks in advance

edit: it's a little heavier than anything else i have posted thus far

http://s39.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=26TL ... 4TACZIQEJD

[Kahn]

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[a1075dd63aa12]

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good idea

[Kahn]

The begining sounds a little like that Nirvana song. I can't really critique a rythym track all too well. I like that harmonic hit in the verse.

[GreyBlueAnt]

the slide part seems to go on forever, but it's a good idea.

[mangold]

the beginning is cool, but id crank down the trebble on your guitar a bit, give er a little more voice. The strumming section is cool too, but it wont hold lyrics too well imo. its got that great void/slide that, while it sounds great on its own will cause a problem with vocals. how about instead of the slide you throw in that main chord just an octave higher then hit the harmonic. if you dont mind postin the main rythm section with the slide (tab) ill show ya what i mean.

[katie]

clean sound in my opinion kind of feels like a dragging thought at first, be bummbly like a bus ride into town.

the slide is good, I like it too - timay style nioce.

then it's like you meet a cute girl and she smiles at you. then you proceed about your way with the slide. edgey, neat though. Sounds like a busy mind kind of deed is done (blah, phoey) but still good and then it goes into the ray again of sunshine.

decent sounding guitar, better than my guitar strung ovation.

[katie]

oops double post....sorry.