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Unread post by mangold » Sat Jan 29, 2005 3:48 pm

I wrote an original which i feel is very cool.

I would like somebody to write lyrics and sing them for me.

Thank you that is all.

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edit: (for writing lyrics) arrangement is: intro, chorus, verse, verse, chorus, verse, chorus, breakdown (lyricless), chorus, chorus, outro
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Unread post by Tranman66 » Sat Jan 29, 2005 6:24 pm

very nice, this can be a cool instrumental as welll. i like it man, your best work.
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Unread post by mangold » Sat Jan 29, 2005 6:38 pm

thanks man.
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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Sat Jan 29, 2005 6:54 pm

I was born in Jully 1988 as well. :)

Listening now.
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Unread post by MWR » Sat Jan 29, 2005 8:11 pm

Keep going with the riff in the very beggining. That's the only part of the song I liked.
This doesn't build at all. Each section is stapled together, in other words it doesn't sound very cohesive.
Also the harmonics don't fit imo. Sounds like you were just trying to use them without any purpose.
And please use a metronome. I know you haven't been playing very long and good rhythm will come with time but forget all these other "flashy" things you're doing and try to get a good groove going.

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Unread post by GSR » Sat Jan 29, 2005 8:14 pm

dmbguitar718 wrote:I was born in Jully 1988 as well. :)

Listening now.
Damn, you're younger than I am, and are one hell of a beast with a guitar, judging from your tabs.

I coulda sworn you were 20something.
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Unread post by Dheibs » Sat Jan 29, 2005 8:24 pm

i think it would be tough to make GOOD lyrics for this song...but i very much like it. nice job man

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Unread post by mangold » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:01 am

MWR wrote:Keep going with the riff in the very beggining. That's the only part of the song I liked.
This doesn't build at all. Each section is stapled together, in other words it doesn't sound very cohesive.
Also the harmonics don't fit imo. Sounds like you were just trying to use them without any purpose.
And please use a metronome. I know you haven't been playing very long and good rhythm will come with time but forget all these other "flashy" things you're doing and try to get a good groove going.
aw, you no like the harmonics? i came up with the progression first (chorus) and kinda forced myself to come up with the verse, so thats why its not as cohesive as i would like. i did use a metronome :( . you can tap your foot to it...

thanks for the comments mike.
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Unread post by mangold » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:02 am

Dheibs wrote:i think it would be tough to make GOOD lyrics for this song...but i very much like it. nice job man
thanks. i agree its tough to make lyrics for the song... thats why i turned to the boards :D

nobody gonna attempt lyrics? i suck so bad at writing them
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Unread post by Tranman66 » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:03 am

dmbguitar718 wrote:I was born in Jully 1988 as well. :)

Listening now.
same here!
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Unread post by mangold » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:05 am

thats clearly thge best month in the best year ever.
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Unread post by Tranman66 » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:08 am

oh wait sorry, i am in January. my bad.
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Unread post by mangold » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:10 am

your out of the best month ever club
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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:17 am

hahahaha

what day, andy?
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Unread post by eliot1171 » Sun Jan 30, 2005 12:24 am

Hey Andy, I'd like to help you out. I'm kinda the opp as you. I'm not very good at guitar but I feel I have a decent voice (sample: http://www.purevolume.com/eliotmays) and a good ear for what sounds good and works. I'll keep workin on the song IF you want. Let me know.
~E

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