been a while...here's a new song -- ladybug

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been a while...here's a new song -- ladybug

Unread post by JeffVyain » Fri Jan 21, 2005 12:53 am

any critiques would be appreciated, but just listen if that's all u wanna do...lyrics:

lady, fly on by
fly on toward the sun
lady of the fall
climbing slow up my window
window

lady, do your thing
fly on toward the sun
toward the sun

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/alb ... 18&alid=-1

edit: link is fixed

just click the play button to the right of the bottom song labeled ladybug. if that doesn't work for some reason you can press the down arrow and download it
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Unread post by mangold » Fri Jan 21, 2005 5:55 pm

FILE NOT FOUND!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH!
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Unread post by JeffVyain » Tue Jan 25, 2005 2:00 am

it should work...i haven't had a single friend i've sent it to say that there has been a problem. has anyone else had this problem?
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Unread post by Brock » Tue Jan 25, 2005 2:18 am

take a look at the link - looks like you copied it from a forum that shortens URL's by adding "..." in the middle.
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Unread post by MWR » Tue Jan 25, 2005 3:23 am

Do I have to do everything around here. :wink:

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/?aid=4018/singles

This is nice. I really like the intro. You're not trying to do too much.
The guitar is good although there are times when it's little harsh. Try adding a bit of compression to keeps those peaks down.
Overall this is cool little song. It get's the mood across really well even if it is light on lyrics.
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Unread post by JeffVyain » Tue Jan 25, 2005 3:15 pm

thanks for fixing that, MWR. i had no idea. and also thanks for your thoughts

trippnbill, you're right i copied it from a songwriting forum at homerecording.com
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Unread post by mangold » Tue Jan 25, 2005 3:22 pm

not bad, the intro gets a little annoying for me, but its clear you have song writing talent. the guitar should be smoother, and if possible played slide. that would be great. overall good, keep posting
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