My very first original..lyrics inside
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My very first original..lyrics inside
I just wrote this today..it's like the first real song I've ever written. It's called "Let Yourself Go". I am going to record it at some point today, but I just wanted to see what you guys thought of the lyrics. When you read them, what do you think is the story behind it? Just curious to know what you guys think. Anyways, it's very simple..the verses and chorus are C - C/B - Am - F. The tiny little bridge part is Dm - G. There are also a couple of riffs that I plan on putting in the intro and outro. Any tips and stuff are welcome, I think I need it. Thanks guys!
"Let Yourself Go"
I want to know how you feel
I don’t want you to be scared
Just know that I am here waiting
And my heart is prepared
I know you’ve had some issues
In dealing with the past
But this is something brand new
And it’s approaching very fast
Let yourself go
You need to think with your heart
Let yourself go
Something amazing is about to start
Don’t try to stop yourself
From feeling what is there
You know that I will be careful with your heart
I won’t let it break or tear
It’s easy to see that you feel it too
The touch of your hand feels so safe
These feelings are so undeniable
So just hear me when I say…
Let yourself go
You need to think with your heart
Let yourself go
Something amazing is about to start
There is so much we can give to each other
But right now trust is the key
Don’t worry about everything around us
Picture the world as you and me
Trust me when I say
I’ll be there for you everyday
Let yourself go
You need to think with your heart
Let yourself go
Because I don’t want us to part
Let yourself go...
"Let Yourself Go"
I want to know how you feel
I don’t want you to be scared
Just know that I am here waiting
And my heart is prepared
I know you’ve had some issues
In dealing with the past
But this is something brand new
And it’s approaching very fast
Let yourself go
You need to think with your heart
Let yourself go
Something amazing is about to start
Don’t try to stop yourself
From feeling what is there
You know that I will be careful with your heart
I won’t let it break or tear
It’s easy to see that you feel it too
The touch of your hand feels so safe
These feelings are so undeniable
So just hear me when I say…
Let yourself go
You need to think with your heart
Let yourself go
Something amazing is about to start
There is so much we can give to each other
But right now trust is the key
Don’t worry about everything around us
Picture the world as you and me
Trust me when I say
I’ll be there for you everyday
Let yourself go
You need to think with your heart
Let yourself go
Because I don’t want us to part
Let yourself go...
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that: i´m in love with Del <3
kinda destroys the lyrics.
kinda destroys the lyrics.
best on the board:
http://www.dmbtabs.com/boards/viewtopic ... &start=150
Speeny: You two are gods among men
http://www.dmbtabs.com/boards/viewtopic ... &start=150
Speeny: You two are gods among men
I'm thinking person A and person B are in love/lust but person B is having issues with everything else around them.
My advice is to make the lyrics more personal. Write about specifics that person A and person B went through. Remember that there are a whole lot of people who have gone through similar things and it's up to you to make the situation your own.
My advice is to make the lyrics more personal. Write about specifics that person A and person B went through. Remember that there are a whole lot of people who have gone through similar things and it's up to you to make the situation your own.
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Yeah writing about specifics could be a good idea..but I think i am going more for a more general feel with this one. Because it DOES happen to a lot of people. Thanks for your input! Keep it coming guys...I'm new to song writing and I'd like some more criticism.
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chosta wrote:penis's are the the devil amirite
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Yeah, sorry i didn't get to it today guys! I plan on getting to it tomorrow...i'm wasted right now. haha....anyways, i will post it up tomorrow. night!
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