please critique this song - new one from big X

Xoosh · Unread post by **Xoosh** » Wed Feb 12, 2003 9:45 am

hey guys... this is brand spankin new.. written with no practice (intentionally), and almost improv, but not quite. i am making a cd (3 or 4 -- maybe less songs) for a potential girlfriend for valentines day of music that i write on the spot when thinking of her... if this song sounds depressing to you explain why... if it sounds contemplative... explain why... please! i need HONEST reliable feed back

http://www.eastofbeautiful.com/music/loree_1.mp3

regards,
x

DropD-MB · Unread post by **DropD-MB** » Wed Feb 12, 2003 2:52 pm

Xoosh...

What I liked....

Nice Chord's.. Very Consistent throughout the whole song. I Also liked the progessions as well, Made the song very fluid. By the way what intro chords are you using?

What I didn't like....or lack there of.

The overlay of the solo in the beginning of the song seemed to be a bit off. But when it hits 2 minutes into the song everything seems right on track. I would redo your solo for the timing. But I could have just been imaging things. Let me listen to it again.

Kind of sounded like Yanni or A relaxation type song. Not by any means is that a bad thing. I wouldn't mind smoking a bong and falling asleep to it.

Overall Great Job.

DropD-MB · Unread post by **DropD-MB** » Wed Feb 12, 2003 2:59 pm

Never mind about the solo stuff. I listened to it straight though rather then letting it buffer (stop-go-stop-go). The second time around sounded better for some reason. I usually need to hear a song a couple of times before I can analyze it.... But Much better listening the second time around.

johntherevelator · Unread post by **johntherevelator** » Wed Feb 12, 2003 3:13 pm

i found it very relaxing
i dont find it depressing, but it doesnt come off as a love song either

its hard to explain
when i was listening to it it made me visualize sunsets and beaches and the ocean

just a relaxing atmosphere

it was very good
the only thing i would suggest is to add a few harmonies in with the lead to make it sound even better

now i critiqued yours
when are you gonna critique my billies cover?

MyHeartIsYours813 · Unread post by **MyHeartIsYours813** » Wed Feb 12, 2003 11:37 pm

Hey Xoosh...Listening to your song as I'm writing this...
I don't find it one bit depressing. It is very very relaxing...and it does come off as a love song to me because when i listen to it it makes me think of my fiancee...so good job on writing something with some romantic atmosphere...but i do understand what johntherevelator is saying when he says it doesn't seem like a love song...when I listen to this song, it does make me visualize sunsets and and beaches as well...but i visualize them with my girl being there lol...but maybe that's just because I'm head over heels lol...Anyhow, GOOD WORK, not a weak spot there! Very nice!

firedancer86 · Unread post by **firedancer86** » Thu Feb 13, 2003 5:40 pm

Good as always Xoosh...I like all of your stuff (thus far) in the sense that it is all instrumental and, well, good!

They are the kinda' songs that you like right off the bat, and the more you listen to them, the more familiar you get with parts (most musicals do that...parts grow on you).

Great job man :wink:

Xoosh · Unread post by **Xoosh** » Thu Feb 13, 2003 6:37 pm

mucho thankos.. sorry if i havent had a chance to critique others work, i've been working overnight 12 hour shifts at my job so literally all i do is sleep and go to work.

thanks for the comments... anyone have a problem with the huge use of reverb?

/x

firedancer86 · Unread post by **firedancer86** » Thu Feb 13, 2003 11:00 pm

Xoosh wrote:mucho thankos.. sorry if i havent had a chance to critique others work, i've been working overnight 12 hour shifts at my job so literally all i do is sleep and go to work.

thanks for the comments... anyone have a problem with the huge use of reverb?

/x

its all good man...you will just have alot to listen to whenever you get a chance eh? :wink:

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