Long Black Vail cover

indigo · Unread post by **indigo** » Mon Dec 01, 2003 8:34 am

Ay this is my 2nd cover. Please please comment

http://www.angelfire.com/theforce/shadow110

horsmar15 · Unread post by **horsmar15** » Mon Dec 01, 2003 1:11 pm

Guitar was good, and vocals were pretty good as well. You seemed to do very well on the high notes but fell flat a few times on the low notes. So I guess mabye you should concentrate more on your low range. Overall, very good though

Xoosh · Unread post by **Xoosh** » Mon Dec 01, 2003 1:30 pm

the first 30 seconds:
excellent start - guitar is solid and the 10 years ago line was perfect.

you hold your notes our very nicely..

:42 - "she walks these hills in a long black" (veil and wail -- very nice) -- dont try to sing like dave. use your own voice =)

1:04 "knows" you sort of hold it out awkwardly.

"and" and the a vowel seems to give you trouble in the high register.

2:23 - "near" watch that note.

that's the negative critique, the song is very solid. if i heard "you" cover this song at a show or something i'd be thrilled -- it's very simple and true to the meaning and genuinity of the song.

great job overall - it can definitley be a tough song. especially because the meaning and words of the song require a deliberation and thought to touch the listener correctly... which i think you have a strong grasp on.

good job,
x

Appfro · Unread post by **Appfro** » Mon Dec 01, 2003 6:17 pm

decent guitar work. you kinda sped up the chorus but it sounded really good. pretty good job, i like how you changed it enough to make it different. but again (i think i said this in your other post) it sounds like your vocals are being held back and you need to let go. although i think the vocals in this one are a lot better than in the other one. good job man.

DustyDave · Unread post by **DustyDave** » Mon Dec 01, 2003 11:22 pm

You got a very nice voice for this song i think , it fits well with the song , its on key , guitar was smooth , sometimes during those lower tones , your voice seems to fade a little too much like mentioned above , its like you're holding back or lose the air you got in your lungs or something , but thats the only thing i can say about it , i liked it very much

indigo · Unread post by **indigo** » Tue Dec 02, 2003 2:09 am

i guess i was concentrating

on the guitar more. I played that one with a cheap as guitar and i was trying to compensate. Singgin is still pretty new 2 me, il try 2 work on it.

thanks

olkskoolpik · Unread post by **olkskoolpik** » Tue Dec 02, 2003 12:06 pm

anybody else miss Xooshs' critiques, thanks for putting the time for some constructive criticism.

Ben

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