new guitar, new song, please listen!

[ksutterley]

I just got some new recording equipment and a new guitar. I have posted some songs on here before, and I was hoping that I could get some more critiquing on my music. Here is a song called "Out of Sight." Let me know what you guys think!

http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.phpac ... D00FFA251E

[mangold]

I think you dont know how to work ysi

[ksutterley]

sorry, try this one.

http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?a ... l@ucsd.edu

[Gold]

The guitarwork was very nice, you have a cool sound, but I felt the song was a little bit rushed? And the vocals could use some work, but you have a good thing going. I really think the song should go a little slower though. Great work anyway, keep it up

ps. what kind of a guitar do you get?

[sfmartins]

I agree with Gold.

Acoustically it would sound better if it was slower.

But the song seems to have a great potential!

Congratulations man!

[ksutterley]

It's a 2005 Taylor 814ce. Thanks for the advice guys!

[Appfro]

the guitar work was fine, i like the part between the chorus and the verse. i think you should work on your vocals a bit. just try to force them out a bit more, use your diaphragm a bit more. also, it seems like the song is a bit out of your comfortable range. maybe try dropping the song a half a step. that'll help. you definitely have vocal potential cause you hit most of your notes, but the ones you're off on, you don't even get close. just means w/ practice comes perfect. i would work on rhythm a bit. i'm not sure if you meant to change the rhythm at 2:20 but it wasn't enough of a change to be able to tell if you did it by accident or not. so if it's meant to be like that, i would slow it down quite a bit so people know you meant to do it.