New Original- Life Was Good (The World Acted Like It Should)

[HumbleMonkey]

new song, its a small little song but i like it. theres some timing issues with this one but whatever let me know what you think

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Life Was Good (The World Acted Like It Should)

When the planes crashed down we gathered around holding hands side by side
Churches filled heads bowed down in prayer togetherness filled the air
People cared for each other for a time but soon it would pass by
And life was good for once the world acted like it should

A young girl died in my class today left me speechless don’t know what to say
A service held the very next day but soon our thoughts they went away
People cared for each other for a time but soon it would pass by
And life was good for once the world acted like it should


The levees broke and over water flowed filling a city like a pool
We gathered around to give a helping hand once again find the land
People cared for each other for a time but soon it would pass by
And life was good for once the world acted like it should

People cared for each other for a time but soon it would pass by
And life was good for once the world acted like it should

[JonesI15]

Love the lyrics of the song. Overall the song made me think of Dylan, but maybe I'm wrong. Voice could use some work on this one, but if you were going for Dylan style, then I think you should keep the same voice. Overall, it was a very enjoyable song, and definitely one I'd listen to again because of it's Dylanesque quality.

[mangold]

voice still needs alot fo work, you're talkng... a very hippy song. nice touch. keep recording and posting man.

[HumbleMonkey]

yeah i know all about vocals, its just tough to really sing in my dorm room, the past couple of songs ive just been doing this quite thing just to get it out. ill try to find some time and really give you better vocals.

[HumbleMonkey]

Love the lyrics of the song. Overall the song made me think of Dylan, but maybe I'm wrong. Voice could use some work on this one, but if you were going for Dylan style, then I think you should keep the same voice. Overall, it was a very enjoyable song, and definitely one I'd listen to again because of it's Dylanesque quality.

thanks man. i am a huge dylan fan and he does influence me quite a bit, although i am trying to make/keep a style of my own. thanks again

edit: quick question, have you ever heard any of my other stuff or heard me say i was a dylan fan?

[HumbleMonkey]

voice still needs alot fo work, you're talkng... a very hippy song. nice touch. keep recording and posting man.

ok, when its comes to singing, i know i need work hitting notes and more energy and stuff. but i think my singing style is just different, its not like your or appfro's which are more of the acoustic guitar singer type of guy if that makes any sense, im not even sure. i do have to try to really "sing" my songs more but style wise im not sure exactly how far im gonna go.
thanks for the critique, i can count on you to give me some good feedback.

[HumbleMonkey]

one more question, mainly for you andy or even mitch, the problems you have with my songs are basically how i perform them, singing and rhythm issues, its not the actually songwriting right?

[mangold]

one more question, mainly for you andy or even mitch, the problems you have with my songs are basically how i perform them, singing and rhythm issues, its not the actually songwriting right?

no the songwriting is good, this one is weaker than stuff I've heard from you before, but its all good.

[Appfro]

dude, this is a good song. i've heard dylan in you before but this one hits the nail on the head. your rhythm is times ten better than the others, you still got the talk/sing vocals, but i think that's just your style. i dig it i read up and saw some contradicting statements, but this is my favorite that i've heard from you.

[HumbleMonkey]

dude, this is a good song. i've heard dylan in you before but this one hits the nail on the head. your rhythm is times ten better than the others, you still got the talk/sing vocals, but i think that's just your style. i dig it i read up and saw some contradicting statements, but this is my favorite that i've heard from you.

wow, thanks a lot man

[JonesI15]

thanks man. i am a huge dylan fan and he does influence me quite a bit, although i am trying to make/keep a style of my own. thanks again

edit: quick question, have you ever heard any of my other stuff or heard me say i was a dylan fan?

Yeah, i'm a huge fan too. I can't ever get enough. I'm sure I have heard some of your other stuff, as I check often on here for new stuff. However, nothing comes to mind. I know I've read somewhere that someone was a huge bob dylan fan, although i'm sure there's more than one on this site. I'd love to see some more from you though. It's definitely good to keep a style of your own. I know i'll play some songs and anybody who's listening will say that it sounded like bob dylan. I think it's because i've listened/sang along too much with bob. I'd much rather have a style of my own though which comes through on most songs i play.

[TriPPin'BiLLies']

i love this song man... i think it is great, and your voice is really good. yeah your style sounds like dylans but thats where your inspiration comes from. I love the harp , im trying to write a song with a harp its so much fun but you do an awesome job. Keep rocking the harp!