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Rubinster
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My first original

Unread post by Rubinster » Thu May 25, 2006 4:10 am

This is a song that I just wrote. It's just strummed chords and singing, so it still needs some time to grow. But I'd like to hear what you think of my voice and the song so far. Any opinions are highly appreciated, no matter if they're negative or positive. And sorry for the recording quality which I know isn't very good :?

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Unread post by Rubinster » Thu May 25, 2006 2:26 pm

Link for faster download (hopefully):

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Unread post by Kahn » Thu May 25, 2006 3:34 pm

recording qualilty leaves something to be desired. The guitar sounds muffled but I get where you wanted to go with it. Your vocals are good. Not outstanding but good. All in all, I feel a better recording would have done more justice to the song. It gets a little repetative to be honest. Definatley not a bad job though.
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Unread post by Rubinster » Tue May 30, 2006 12:57 pm

Thanks for the comment! All of your points make sense to me. I'll do what I can to make it better. Some more opinions would be very helpful though. So please leave your thoughts!
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Unread post by ut4ever8 » Tue May 30, 2006 6:36 pm

i noticed it being a bit repeditive as well, but i liked it alot good work
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Unread post by Rubinster » Tue Jun 06, 2006 1:33 am

Thank you! Some more please?
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Unread post by Rubinster » Wed Jun 21, 2006 1:31 pm

re-up:

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Unread post by Easy E » Wed Jun 21, 2006 2:06 pm

Very good vocals. You switched the melody up enough to be not as repetitive as it could have been. I thought it was pretty good for a first effort.
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Unread post by Rubinster » Sat Jun 24, 2006 9:12 am

Thank you very much! Glad you liked the vocals cos I still don't know about my voice :? Right now I'm working on the verses to make them a little less repetitive. Hopefully... Probably I'll change the whole melody and leave just the chorus the way it is.
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