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I was bored so I wrote and recorded an original

Unread post by Kahn » Mon Jan 09, 2006 4:37 pm

I'm bored and waiting to eat dinner, so I expanded on a riff I had in my head and wrote some lyrics right quick. About 15 minute effort, but let me know what you think. It will take 2:30 minutes of your time

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Unread post by horsmar15 » Mon Jan 09, 2006 6:25 pm

I like the riff. I don't know if I care for the melody line though that much. Since this was only a 15minute effort give it some time and develop the vocal line, and this could sound pretty good
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Unread post by i like tictacs » Mon Jan 09, 2006 7:10 pm

Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
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Unread post by Kahn » Mon Jan 09, 2006 7:24 pm

i like tictacs wrote:Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
it is neither very rocky or jazzy, so I dont see how that is a valid comment. Thanks though
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Unread post by topgun17 » Mon Jan 09, 2006 7:33 pm

not working...
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Unread post by Kahn » Mon Jan 09, 2006 8:01 pm

topgun17 wrote:not working...
open it in iTunes
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Unread post by i like tictacs » Mon Jan 09, 2006 8:38 pm

Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
it is neither very rocky or jazzy, so I dont see how that is a valid comment. Thanks though
It has that wank aspect.

Thanks though. Tried to be nice, guess not.
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Unread post by Kahn » Mon Jan 09, 2006 8:40 pm

i like tictacs wrote:
Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
it is neither very rocky or jazzy, so I dont see how that is a valid comment. Thanks though
It has that wank aspect.

Thanks though. Tried to be nice, guess not.
dude, please stay out of my threads. The only thing you do is try to make clever (yet unfunny) cracks towards me. That's not what the boards are for, I dont need you badgering me with your satire.
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Unread post by i like tictacs » Mon Jan 09, 2006 8:42 pm

I was being serious, but if you wish.
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Unread post by Speenis » Mon Jan 09, 2006 9:39 pm

Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:
Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
it is neither very rocky or jazzy, so I dont see how that is a valid comment. Thanks though
It has that wank aspect.

Thanks though. Tried to be nice, guess not.
dude, please stay out of my threads. The only thing you do is try to make clever (yet unfunny) cracks towards me. That's not what the boards are for, I dont need you badgering me with your satire.
chill out kahn

It sounds 10x more like Keller than it does Umphrey's, in fact, nothing about it resembles any UM song. I like the guitar work, vocals sound pretty good too, but like someone else said, I'm not a huge fan of the vocal melody. Maybe try reworking that.
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Unread post by Machtimus » Mon Jan 09, 2006 10:23 pm

i like tictacs wrote:
Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
it is neither very rocky or jazzy, so I dont see how that is a valid comment. Thanks though
It has that wank aspect.
Concurred.
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Unread post by JCork » Tue Jan 10, 2006 12:56 am

kahn you need to relax i was gonna listen to your song but not after reading those remarks. cool.
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Unread post by Kahn » Tue Jan 10, 2006 2:17 am

sorry evveertyonee
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Unread post by Gold » Tue Jan 10, 2006 3:26 am

Speenis wrote:
Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:
Kahn wrote:
i like tictacs wrote:Sounds like umphrey's or sci.
it is neither very rocky or jazzy, so I dont see how that is a valid comment. Thanks though
It has that wank aspect.

Thanks though. Tried to be nice, guess not.
dude, please stay out of my threads. The only thing you do is try to make clever (yet unfunny) cracks towards me. That's not what the boards are for, I dont need you badgering me with your satire.
chill out kahn

It sounds 10x more like Keller than it does Umphrey's, in fact, nothing about it resembles any UM song. I like the guitar work, vocals sound pretty good too, but like someone else said, I'm not a huge fan of the vocal melody. Maybe try reworking that.
I agree, reminded me a lot about Keller. I liked the whole song, actually. Well done, Kahn.
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Unread post by Speenis » Tue Jan 10, 2006 1:42 pm

JCork wrote:kahn you need to relax i was gonna listen to your song but not after reading those remarks. cool.
If you don't want to listen to a recording then don't...but don't make an idiotic post that nothing good can come out of. If anything, people won't be so quick to check out your recordings.
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