New Song - trying something new and need some feedback

[oldman]

Hey guys...and girls, this is a new tune i'm working on I really need some feedback on it. I'm trying to cut the length down and tweak some stuff. Any input would be great. Thanks.

http://www.jamiebarr.net/media/mp3/crossroad_mixed.mp3

[horsmar15]

You may want to remove a verse or cut down on some of the instrumental stuff to cut back on time. In my opinion, the song would sound better with more vocal variation and maybe some difference in the verse phonetically. It dosen't really grab my atention and I think some good varition might help that.
Other than that, you play techinically well and your voice is good but could use more range.