Need some critique on a recording...

[gcom007]

go to http://www.myspace.com/elliotryanlive

listen to Checking Out, which is live and it sounds terrible but it gives you an idea of the song, then listen to the Checking Out In Progress at the bottom which is a version I'm working on at home and tell me what you think. There's some weird guitar phase thing going on with Myspace compression, but oh well. Focus on that weird drum loop. Yay or nay? other comments welcome. Still needs a redone, cleaner acoustic track and electric and vocals. Today or tomorrow it'll be finished up.

[horsmar15]

It is hard to tell what the studio version will sound like from the quality of the first track. The progression in the verse was ok, the chorus was more catchy. Overall average in my opinion. Athough I listened to "a little more" and I thought that was pretty good, your voice sounds a bit like Ari Hest.