Original song i just recorded...

[Proof2k2]

I just penned this a couple of days ago thought i'd put up a rough copy of it. Again this is rough. No overdubbing just a single track with me and an acostic. So tell me what ya think. Thanks.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/1/proof2k2music.htm

[isaac]

*chuckles* the guitar part reminds me of The Calling's "Wherever You Will Go" or whatever the heck it's called.

it is pretty rough. i think the vocals can be smoothed out a lot more. sometimes it feels like you're not using enough air, and the vocals come out too raspy and too whispery, which i have a problem of doing too, even if i'm using all the breath i have. lol. just keep working on it, and it'll get better.

there were a lot of off-key notes when you sing in your lower range, but that'll come with time. it doesn't seem like you stray too far around, and you keep within a middle tone. that can be good and bad, for for a 4 minute song it may be a little tedious. work on putting some dynamics in, especially with the chorus towards the last half of the song. if you can make it louder during those parts, that'd be great, and it'd grab the listener a lot more.

as for the ending, i didn't really like it. the use of chords came in too suddenly and it was a really rough transition. work on writing something a little better out there.

keep working on the song as a whole. put it up again when you smooth it out, i'd love to hear it.

oh! and by the way, welcome to the boards! hehe.