Original, "Holding Me"..

[JacknCoke]

thanks for the kind words..i hope to have another original up by the end of the week...as for the guitar, its a ibanez aw100 cutaway..gives enough tone for the price i wanted to pay at the time..

[Appfro]

I really liked the music. Sounded great. The chords themselves may have all been simple but you have 2 or 3 really good progressions that are unique to each other. Awesome stuff.

I'm not a huge fan of the lyrics, but I have heard and written much worse My only suggestion would be to make sure you're not forcing words into a sentence just so you can rhyme.

The vocals need some work. You have hard times w/ some of the high notes and you don't annunciate at all. Suggestion would be to just work on the high notes, sing songs you can't sing over and over, eventually you'll get up there, and make sure you open your mouth and over-annunciate your words, in the music it'll come out sounding normal.

Good work man.

[JacknCoke]

thank you for the tips..ive been waiting for someone to actually catch my flaws and lend me some advice, as you have..ive been working with my vocals as much as i can lately, basically putting on the radio low so i can hear myself sing..its a slow moving process, but hopefully im gettin there...lol...as for the lyrics, there was a tiny bit forced...but for the most part it came to me, kind of has a personal story behind it...im glad they arent the worst you've heard though, lol...anyways, thanks again..