One more original-HELP MYSELF

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One more original-HELP MYSELF

Unread post by oldman » Wed Oct 06, 2004 1:12 pm

Hope ya'll like it.

http://www.jaybarr.net/music/helpmyself.mp3
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Unread post by GreyBlueAnt » Wed Oct 06, 2004 1:15 pm

dead link.
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Unread post by oldman » Wed Oct 06, 2004 1:30 pm

Fixed the link....jesus i cant even spell my own name. hahaha!
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Unread post by GreyBlueAnt » Fri Oct 08, 2004 2:27 pm

Okay, take this for what it's worth. I like the song, good voice, good guitar. about 2:45 into the song, so far it's been pretty mellow, but not too mellow. Now this is just my opinion on song wriiting, I'm of the opinion that songs should change mood through the song, but within the same theme. If someone writes a song that is easy going through the whole thing, it can get boring after a while. This song is perfect for building into something with a little emo at the end. "I want some freedom" should be "I WANT SOME FREEDOM!!!". I'm not saying to scream, but i guess i want you to feel it more, so that i feel it more. To me songs are 10% what you hear and 90% what you feel when you listen to it. All in all, i liked it, i just don't think it's a finished song yet, but it's well on it's way.
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