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DMB=ice · Unread post by **DMB=ice** » Wed Feb 26, 2003 11:24 pm

Sorry, no free money, but there is a new song i made up today, take a listen. I havent made up any words to it yet. Tell me which parts you like and which you don't. I threw a little jam section in there as well. Theres a little spike at the end which bugs the crap outta me but I couldnt figure out how to get it to go away. Lay it on me...

DMB=ice · Unread post by **DMB=ice** » Wed Feb 26, 2003 11:26 pm

Sorry im an idiot heres the link...

http://webpages.charter.net/guitarplayi ... 0song).mp3

DustyDave · Unread post by **DustyDave** » Thu Feb 27, 2003 12:18 am

Not bad at all , i really loved the flow in the song , not too rocky and not too slow , it was very Dave , i liked it

Can't wait till you put some vocals on it though

firedancer86 · Unread post by **firedancer86** » Thu Feb 27, 2003 9:51 am

I am SO impressed...I am happy for you too...this is real cool man, now you have shown your marks (it may not be fair, but now your opinions weigh more)...

good tune...I wish it was longer...I like the progression, and I like the Jimmy Page like intro chords...

played to perfection...clean cut and downright nasty on the guitar...

well, I am looking forward to hearing more from you in the future!

Xoosh · Unread post by **Xoosh** » Thu Feb 27, 2003 10:08 am

Very nice. if you're playing with a capo on, take it off. if you're not, lower the key several steps... that'd be my first suggestions, songs this high without a bass balance (at least the first minute or so) can get tiresome on the ears because there's little balance.. the progression leading up to 1:05, and what you start at like 1:19 is PERFECT, you should develope that into something... 1:30.. tab that out for me

i might like to ... uh... use that

1:41 bad break, sounds like a seperate song from the first. . . i think your song would sound really cool if you oepened it up with the progression you start at like 1:58 or so, and end with the introduction.... DEFINITELY need some bass notes to balance this song out. it's REALLY nice, im listening to it for the 3rd time... and i REALLY like the 1:20 stuff ... i'd like a whole song with words just of that style of song... well here's a good comment for you.,.. you've inspired me to back to writing soem music today

thanks !

/x

monkeyBoy22 · Unread post by **monkeyBoy22** » Thu Feb 27, 2003 11:09 am

sounds great!, I'd agree w/ Xoosh about lowering the key, and basically his whole 2nd paragraph...

the jam part reminded me of "Love of my Life" (for some reason?), maybe it was just the feel of it, but it sounds fun to play and that you could come up with a great melody once you get the flow worked out a little better...

rock on!, and you've also inspired me to play around with some of my own things I haven't touched in a while....thanks...

can't wait to hear the progress on this one...

dmplayer · Unread post by **dmplayer** » Thu Feb 27, 2003 3:08 pm

Well, I don't usually post critiques just because my computer takes F...O..R...E...V...E....R to d/l songs, but I must say that this was a really cool little ditty. I was bopping my head along to it and everything. I really enjoyed the whole piece, but you might consider what Xoosh said about switching up the break that you do at like 1:30, right before you go into the single note progression. I thought that part kinda took away from the momentum of the song. Its really not that much of a quibble though because, like I said, I was moving to the song and thats always a good thing. Good work......I give it a B+. (Could easily be an A with some cool vocals or a little more length)

GOOD JOB!! Keep posting your stuff, I'd like to hear more....

later,
kyle

DMB=ice · Unread post by **DMB=ice** » Thu Feb 27, 2003 7:05 pm

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate your feedback and suggestions. Ill try taking it down a few steps and switching around the order as well is finding a way to balance out the tones. After listening to it more i realize i really need to improve the flow. Thanks for your help!

-Philip

vipergts281 · Unread post by **vipergts281** » Fri Feb 28, 2003 4:10 am

Nice job.

Would you mind posting the tabs from it?

ModestMouse2003 · Unread post by **ModestMouse2003** » Fri Feb 28, 2003 4:31 pm

thats some hella sweet music dude. I like it alot, and you should make more, cause id listen to it again and again.

The Man of The Hour · Unread post by **The Man of The Hour** » Sun Mar 02, 2003 1:59 am

Yes, excellent guitar work there. I love your style, very unique. Keep it up

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