Happy V. Day everybody (song inside)

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Happy V. Day everybody (song inside)

Unread post by firedancer86 » Wed Feb 12, 2003 12:04 am

I wrote this awhile back for my gf...I'm gonna put some lyrics to it and give it to her for heart day :wink: ... any thoughts???


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Unread post by firedancer86 » Wed Feb 12, 2003 12:24 am

grave, jason, cricket, tico, john, anybody?

tell me how i could make it better for her! :cry:
"serinity now...insanity later"
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Unread post by gravedigger » Wed Feb 12, 2003 12:27 am

firedancer86 wrote:grave, jason, cricket, tico, john, anybody?

tell me how i could make it better for her! :cry:

very very nice, firedancer. It would be GREAT with lyrics and maybe a bridge part before you end it with the main riff. I enjoyed it.

sounds kinda like the Stone chorus, that main riff, but you put your own stuff into it.
good, and you?

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Unread post by DmbFanJason » Wed Feb 12, 2003 12:32 am

damn fire, that was good...i wouldnt know what to suggest, for i am not a creator, just a replicator.

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Unread post by billywestom » Wed Feb 12, 2003 12:54 am

good call jason, same here. i wrote a riff using dave chords, but haven't come up with any lyrics yet. in time... :(
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Unread post by gregplaysguitar » Wed Feb 12, 2003 3:27 am

hey fire I really dig this tune! Nice work.......Nice chord progression......yeah this one is really begging for some lyrics. Nice work, I especially like around 1:34, on the transition back into the A section. Very chill.

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Unread post by ticohans » Wed Feb 12, 2003 8:33 am

Great work, good quality. If I had a keyboard, I could jam out some mad keys on that for you.

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Unread post by ticohans » Wed Feb 12, 2003 8:34 am

hey greg, good to see another music major on these boards.

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Unread post by cave_cricket » Wed Feb 12, 2003 1:59 pm

firedancer86 wrote:grave, jason, cricket, tico, john, anybody?

tell me how i could make it better for her! :cry:
I'm at shcool...I'll let you know when I get home...

Peace,

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Unread post by johntherevelator » Wed Feb 12, 2003 3:16 pm

i liked it alot
i agree- it does sound similar to the stone chorus but more relaxing

what is that i hear in the background?
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Unread post by firedancer86 » Wed Feb 12, 2003 5:00 pm

johntherevelator wrote:i liked it alot
i agree- it does sound similar to the stone chorus but more relaxing

what is that i hear in the background?
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Unread post by MyHeartIsYours813 » Wed Feb 12, 2003 11:28 pm

Damn, man! That was great! Does sound a lot like Dave, but VERY VERY COOL nonetheless!!! I can't even come up with a tune that sounds good, so my hat goes out to you man!
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