look mom, I can fail! (new original)

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look mom, I can fail! (new original)

Unread post by Banjobach » Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:31 am

So this one is really short. I'm all about minimizing suffering.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tw062a1542I

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Look at time sneaking by
all these lives gone awry
All I see are tired souls
staring through their car windows

I wonder,
is this how I grow old
I feel this
numbness taking hold

I was small, dreamt it all
climb a fence, kick a ball
Now I talk a certain way
Bigger words and less to say

I wonder,
Is this how I grow old
I feel this
empty taking hold
I wonder, wonder,
how I'll make it home



Hope you enjoy.

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Unread post by markTR » Mon Mar 09, 2009 11:28 am

Cool song man, not much to critique really. :thumbsup:
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Unread post by Klondog » Mon Mar 09, 2009 12:15 pm

Nice. Enjoyed it.
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Unread post by Banjobach » Mon Mar 09, 2009 3:03 pm

Thank you, as always, for listening gentlemen.

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Unread post by sfmartins » Tue Mar 10, 2009 1:28 am

Sounds really good.

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Unread post by Grachi » Tue May 19, 2009 10:01 pm

awesome awesome stuff. love the lyrics. Always find the most powerful lyrics are the ones that have less to say but more of a meaning to them.
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