Original: "Awake"

GreedylilPig · Unread post by **GreedylilPig** » Tue Feb 17, 2009 9:16 pm

Link: http://plaza.ufl.edu/bbatson/Awake.mp3

It’s quiet now and I’d venture to say
That I’m the only one awake
For miles
She’s on my mind, I feel her fragile frame
If I were in dreams it’d be just the same, so I
Toss and turn a while

I feel compelled to apologize
And I don’t mean to dramatize
It’s those tears in your eyes
That I can’t shake
See the bottom of another glass
And my time is fading fast
But to pray this love will last
I stay awake

Time goes by and the imminent light
Reminds me of all that is right with
You and I
Making a list of the things I'd do
If we could start anew, and once again I
Rehearse these lines

I feel compelled to apologize
And I don’t mean to dramatize
It’s those tears in your eyes
That I can’t shake
See the bottom of another glass
And my time is fading fast
But to pray this love will last
I stay awake

Appreciate the listen. Any comments/critiques also appreciated.

dmbguitar718 · Unread post by **dmbguitar718** » Tue Feb 17, 2009 10:21 pm

good stuff. this could really benefit from some vocal harmonies.

Blake · Unread post by **Blake** » Wed Feb 18, 2009 9:31 pm

this is excellent brian. going straight to the ipod
i love how you ended the song too.

markTR · Unread post by **markTR** » Thu Feb 19, 2009 6:30 pm

Man, this is sad :lol:

I really like how underscored the guitar is, your vocal is definitely good enough to carry the song. Well done

ut4ever8 · Unread post by **ut4ever8** » Sat Feb 21, 2009 12:19 pm

I always enjoy your vocals Brian. Ill be keeping this one for sure

sfmartins · Unread post by **sfmartins** » Thu Feb 26, 2009 2:07 am

I think this is REALLY REALLY good. Kind of a Ryan Adams acoustic with amazing vocals.

I agree it might get a bit better with more harmonies, or probably a strong part.

GreedylilPig · Unread post by **GreedylilPig** » Sat Feb 28, 2009 1:34 pm

Many thanks for the comments, gents.

I agree that it could benefit from some harmonies but I've never been able to add my own harmonies without it sounding way too forced. I also think some violin would complete this song but yeah, I've never even picked up a violin. :lol:

AustinG · Unread post by **AustinG** » Sun Mar 15, 2009 10:09 am

Vocals are strong as always..

Solid song.

Great job and thanks for sharing..

I saw you mention some violin, I don't know if you play piano at all, but SampleTank does a decent job imitating instruments if you get into midi at all...

Austin G.

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