An original Say Goodbye

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An original Say Goodbye

Unread post by DmbSid » Wed Jan 28, 2004 4:47 pm

Here is a song about a girl and all I have left to say about her...

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/craigpagemusic.htm

If you listen please drop a line and tell me what you think
Mr. Page wants out...

"What is written without effort is in general read without pleasure" -- Samuel Johnson

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Unread post by ec_costanzo » Wed Jan 28, 2004 5:01 pm

WOW howd you come up with those lyrics???

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Unread post by ec_costanzo » Wed Jan 28, 2004 5:02 pm

Whops Just now listening to it
By the title i thought you just covered say goodbye by dmb
hahhaha
My bad
After the song is over ill leave feedback
Good so far

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Unread post by DmbSid » Thu Jan 29, 2004 12:15 am

Only 1 reply after 30 some views...Even if you dont like it say something...Thanks
Mr. Page wants out...

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Unread post by 2StepGranny » Thu Jan 29, 2004 2:19 am

Well done, I really enjoyed it. Can't really say anything bad about it. Great job.
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Unread post by Matty Boom » Thu Jan 29, 2004 6:15 am

DmbSid wrote:Only 1 reply after 30 some views...Even if you dont like it say something...Thanks
you might not get a lot of feedback if you're new and haven't been here critiquing other peoples' stuff...it's kind of an implied thing around here...so stick around and listen to some peoples' music!
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Unread post by DmbSid » Thu Jan 29, 2004 4:16 pm

Thanks to all who listened and gave their opinion...Matty Boom-- Thanks for your advice...I think you are right and I will stick around.
Mr. Page wants out...

"What is written without effort is in general read without pleasure" -- Samuel Johnson

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Unread post by AdamCU81 » Fri Jan 30, 2004 3:33 am

I like this. I think it could use a tempo change in there...between verse and chorus would make sense. This song would be even better with a rockin drum beat...a djembe or some other hand drum would work fine. Nice.

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Unread post by KleptoOne » Wed Feb 04, 2004 8:54 pm

I thought it was cool, although I think the song sounds a little too sweet at parts, especially the first time you say "take your hands off of me" given the lyrics I'd expect somthing a little more aggresive. But all in all good stuff man :D

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Unread post by DJR » Wed Feb 04, 2004 9:43 pm

i liked the lyrics, the guitar seemed a little choppy, but the mood of the song totally fit with the lyrics, good job :D

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Unread post by DustyDave » Sat Feb 07, 2004 4:37 am

Overall a very nice song , a little more aggression at certain places could be a good addition , but i liked listening :) Good job , and like Matty said , stick around :)
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