'Stay or leave' meets 'crush'?

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'Stay or leave' meets 'crush'?

Unread post by rampaged.congt » Tue Jan 20, 2004 11:54 am

Hey guys,

I felt like writing some lyrics today and after I did that I thought I'd grap the guitar to see if any good tune fits to the text...
Well I found one that I think is okay..It's not a big thing..just a few chords...
But after I listened to it I thought...
"damn, you just played almost only parts of stay or leave" (standard tuning, though) and the b-chord might make you think I'm gonna play "crush", too, when I start playing...
I'd be happy if some of you would listen to this and tell me if it sounds too much like "stay or leave". I mean it certainly does if you know and love the song...(like all of us do I think ;) ) but is it still "acceptable" as my own song? :?

Anyway, hope you like the song...

:arrow: http://www.angelfire.com/jazz/rampaged.congt/sofar.mp3
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Unread post by rochsuperstar » Tue Jan 20, 2004 3:47 pm

I'd say it does sound a lot like stay or leave it's just a deeper version, but overall it sounded nice..

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Unread post by rampaged.congt » Tue Jan 20, 2004 6:40 pm

what do you mean with "temp. suspended"?
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Unread post by DustyDave » Tue Jan 20, 2004 7:04 pm

The site is temporary suspended , meaning that you exceeded your bandwidth limit , angelfire problem ....
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Unread post by rampaged.congt » Wed Jan 21, 2004 7:46 am

well it's back up now...
thx dusty for the info...
please give it a listen, I'd be happy to hear what you guys think...
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Unread post by borocks » Wed Jan 21, 2004 8:42 am

Also ich mochte das Lied ziemlich gut. Deine Stimme ist gut und passt auch hervorragend zur Gitarre.
Klar, ein bisschen errinnert es schon an Stay or Leave aber die Ähnlichkeit ist nun auch wieder nicht so gross. Der Hauptunterschied besteht in der Variation. Dave hat sehr unterschiedliche Teile (die meines Erachtens) auch nicht alle 100%ig zusammenpassen) und was du spielst ist mehr oder weniger konstant, auch vom Rhytmus her, was allerdings nichts schlechtes bedeutet. Ich mag die kleine Steigerung, die um 3:30 stattfindet und dann das leise ausklingen am Ende. Ich glaube solche Intensitätsunterschiede könntest du noch mehr hervorheben, das macht's spannend...
Zum Englisch gibts nichts zu meckern, genauso wenig wie zur Qualität der Gitarre. Tönt einwandfrei...

Lass wieder mal was hören... ich mag dein Zeug
(vielleicht mal was auf Deutsch)

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Unread post by rampaged.congt » Wed Jan 21, 2004 9:07 am

danke borocks für deine wunderbare nette kritik...
du hast recht, dass ich noch etwas variieren sollte. weil es sonst zu langweilig würde nach der zeit.

ich hatte mir letztens nachdem ich mir nochmal dein "totengräber" und grey street auf deutsch angehört habe, überlegt ob ich mal "where are you going" auf deutsch machen sollte...denn das wäre nicht allzu schwer...
mal sehen ob ich die zeit dafür finde.

bis dann und gruss aus köln,

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Unread post by borocks » Wed Jan 21, 2004 3:10 pm

rampaged.congt wrote:danke borocks für deine wunderbare nette kritik...
du hast recht, dass ich noch etwas variieren sollte. weil es sonst zu langweilig würde nach der zeit.

ich hatte mir letztens nachdem ich mir nochmal dein "totengräber" und grey street auf deutsch angehört habe, überlegt ob ich mal "where are you going" auf deutsch machen sollte...denn das wäre nicht allzu schwer...
mal sehen ob ich die zeit dafür finde.

bis dann und gruss aus köln,

mike

Klar, ein deutsches Dave-Cover von dir wäre sicher der Hammer!
Aber pass auf, es ist nicht so einfach, weil man manchmal Probleme bekommt, dass man die richtige Anzahl Silben auf deutsch zusammenbekommt, so dass es dann auch flüssig klingt. Das hat mich ziemlich Zeit gekostet am Anfang. Deshalb musst du von einer 1:1 Übersetzung absehen... Aber das ist auch gut so, fördert ein bisschen die Kreativität :) . Also ich bin gespannt wie's herauskommt. Viel Glück

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Unread post by DustyDave » Wed Jan 21, 2004 5:01 pm

Come on guys , keep it at english please so the rest of us can follow :lol:

Just gave it a listen , it sounds great , the vocals are very soft and the guitar has a very nice rhythm :)
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Unread post by rampaged.congt » Thu Jan 22, 2004 8:39 am

thx dusty for the nice comment.
sorry for the german-talking...
but "denmark"? i'd have thought you guys could understand a little german actually... :)
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Unread post by Johnny25 » Thu Jan 22, 2004 8:09 pm

man, honestly that was awesome and I completely enjoyed listening to it :D You can hear bits when its a lot like Stay or Leave, but honestly I don't think anyone would care at all. Keep up the great work

-Johnny

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Unread post by rampaged.congt » Fri Jan 23, 2004 8:41 am

thanks johnny that's really nice to hear that from here! thanks for listening
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Unread post by DustyDave » Fri Jan 23, 2004 7:45 pm

rampaged.congt wrote:thx dusty for the nice comment.
sorry for the german-talking...
but "denmark"? i'd have thought you guys could understand a little german actually... :)
Well i used to speak German , but got tired of it and changed majors :lol:
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