new original song, hurray

[dmbguitar718]

this one's all guitar (and vocals). i had plans to include organ and piano, but as i continued work on the song, i realized that the organ would be too overbearing for what the song was becoming.

anyway, here you are. i beleive it's my best song lyrically and i'm satisfied with how the outro turned out.

Someday
http://www.s151305233.onlinehome.us/someday.mp3

[ut4ever8]

Pat, really nice work man. For as talented of a guitar player you are, you seem to keep your song writing work fairly simple which is a complement in my book. I love that in music, it really allows your lyrics to jump out more in my opinion. I dont really have any real critiques, but I really enjoyed it, thanks for sharing.

[SRVDMB]

Very Very well written song in my opinion. Your lyrics are very good and the guitar part doesn't get boring at any time.

A lot of times you can get a little bored with a guitar part, but yours kept me interested throughout the whole song.

Also the harmony adds a lot to the sound of the song. Its actually really cool how one extra voice part can take a song to the next level.

I didn't really have any critiquing to do. I just think you should keep up the writing and make some cool music.

Jack

[SRVDMB]

Very Very well written song in my opinion. Your lyrics are very good and the guitar part doesn't get boring at any time.

A lot of times you can get a little bored with a guitar part, but yours kept me interested throughout the whole song.

Also the harmony adds a lot to the sound of the song. Its actually really cool how one extra voice part can take a song to the next level.

I didn't really have any critiquing to do. I just think you should keep up the writing and make some cool music.

Jack


edit- I think a few piano notes in certain parts of the song would add to it. Like Johnny Cash covering "Hurt" by NIN. He added a few notes in on the piano and it adds to the depth of the song.

[Banjobach]

pretty much thoroughly enjoyed that, as usual. Very hypnotic

[dmbguitar718]

thank you very much guys.