Some unfinished lyrics.

[Teego Time]

Here's a song i'm writing. I KNOW ITS CLICHE, I DON"T CARE. lol, I'm just now finally starting to develope a knack for piecing words together. Anyways suggestions are always welcome, and if you have any other cool lines I could add please mention them

Here it is:

(Intro Section Thing)
When you come down from your cloud
I’ll be waiting here for you
Patiently putting myself through
And through

(Mumble some shit here)

And through and through
This hell
I hate you

You drive me crazy inside
It’s going over in my mind
I can’t feel my hands anymore
When I’m around you, it’s just

(Mumble more shit here)

To much
For me
To handle

(Bridge)
It doesn’t even feel real

(Verse)
When your eyes meet mine
I’m taken
Away

And when your lips touch mine
I’m burning
Inside

When your hand leaves mine
I die

(Chorus)
So let the beast come
We’ll call it out
We’ll fight it off

Show me yourself
I’m show you mine
We’ll make it out
In good time

(Verse)
You always leave me
Dazed and confused

The fire is burning
I’m cauterized
Inside


Here's where I left off cuz I had to go to work. Thanks for taken a look!

[Tranman66]

i like everything except , "When you come down from your cloud" that line is corny man. Anyway, good job. now record it and post it in the recording board!

[Teego Time]

Yeah I'll see what I can do about recording it. *shrug* I don't have any equipment.

[gcom007]

that was random, no offense, but I'd toss it...a little too corny at times and then just random...I hate you? That's endearing...just try not to try...