New Original "Glad I'm Not God"

[mattinbeloit]

I don't know if this is what I'll end up calling the song, but I have to call it something for now. I'm still a bit rough going on the high parts on the vocals but I'm getting a lot better so I think it will come in time. Feedback appreciated...

http://www.sendspace.com/file/dulll6

Here's a link you can just listen to incase sendspace poops out...

http://four.fsphost.com/mattinbeloit/Gl ... IMAGED.mp3

[Appfro]

great chord movement below the root note. i really dig your structures.

i like the progression, you voice is good, your recording quality is great. w/ that said, the song itself isn't my favorite. but here's why. your lyrics sort of drag on. not that the words themselves are bad. just that as you sing it, it sort of bores you on the way to the chorus. i would suggest speeding the song up just a little bit or maybe even figuring out a new vocal melody.

the melody/hook really makes the song. i don't think you have much of a hook which is sad because everything else in the song is awesome. i can only give you those suggestions, but right now it comes off as a default or creed song or the like. and i'm sure that's not what you were going for.

i try not to critique w/o giving some sort of advice, so i hope that helps. the song is like 99% there, it just needs a boost. keep it up though, i'd like to hear more of your stuff.

[checkii]

Apps, that really is nice of you to not only post your music but to ALSO critique other's work. good man.

[Appfro]

Apps, that really is nice of you to not only post your music but to ALSO critique other's work. good man.

i don't feel that you deserve a critique if you don't critique other's stuff. it's supposed to be an unwritten rule here but obviously it isn't holding up.

[checkii]

as to not hijack. I was very impressed with the song. Seemed very well structured and composed. Your recordiong qwuality was very good.
What guitar did you use?
I knwo you have a martin but it wounded more like a tak to me.

i love the main rif.

your voice is good, it just sounds at times like there is an almost eddie veder grunge sound at the end of some word deliveries. I think the more you sing the better it will get.

I agree with apps that the song kind of lulls you to sleep and you want to kind of skip forward to see if soimethign is going to happen to the song.

I would also suggest speeding up a bit or just cutting some of it out. at a 5 minute song I don't like it much, at a 3:45 song I think it is great.

well done. I wish I was one of those people here with a ton of musical klnowledge, but i'm not. so i hope that i was at least a tad helpful.

*hopes musicians that post but never critique start critiquing more.

[mattinbeloit]

Thanks guys, speeding it up a bit is not a bad idea, I'll mess around with it. I used the taylor 714ce for this one. I'm tuned to an open tuning and capoed on the 5th fret. Like you guys said, the singing it still rough but I think it will come in time.

[mattinbeloit]

I don't know why it never really occured to me to speed it up, I've been playing through it faster and I think I might like it better that way. Thanks. I'm going back to school sunday so I'll wait until I have my studio back to rerecord it, add some violin, bass, drums, all that good stuff. This song is screming for some electric guitar now.

[checkii]

I don't know why it never really occured to me to speed it up, I've been playing through it faster and I think I might like it better that way. Thanks. I'm going back to school sunday so I'll wait until I have my studio back to rerecord it, add some violin, bass, drums, all that good stuff. This song is screming for some electric guitar now.

it reminded me of somethign that could be a b-side on Atop all the World Now.
That isnt an insult, its a huge compliment cause it is one of my more favorite albums in the past few years.

keep workign with it and repost it, i'm curious how it turns out.

[a1075dd63aa12]

i like the premise ill type more later, kind of in a rush.

[mattinbeloit]

I don't know why it never really occured to me to speed it up, I've been playing through it faster and I think I might like it better that way. Thanks. I'm going back to school sunday so I'll wait until I have my studio back to rerecord it, add some violin, bass, drums, all that good stuff. This song is screming for some electric guitar now.

it reminded me of somethign that could be a b-side on Atop all the World Now.
That isnt an insult, its a huge compliment cause it is one of my more favorite albums in the past few years.

keep workign with it and repost it, i'm curious how it turns out.

Stop all the world now? Ya, Howie would be able to pull this off better then I can. He's got that raspy voice when he hits high notes that would fit in well. It's funny, I got the special edition of stop all the world now that had extra acoustic tracs on it and I actually gave those acoustic ones a quick listen before mastering it becuase that is especially how I wanted the imaging of the song to resemble. Cool you mentioned that.

[mangold]

the linky is no working for me.

[mattinbeloit]

the linky is no working for me.

i fixy

[mangold]

Ok here we go

Great guitar, well played written and recorded. You really have a nack for it.

I wish you would stop whine/whispering in your vocals. Your shit has so much potential to be absolutely mind blowingly amazing, its just held down by for vocals. Its not that they're bad note or timing wise, its just it sounds so breathy like you have no power behind them at all. Instead of singing in your headvoice, like you should be, you're just pushing your chest voice until it cant take it and it comes out all breathy.

Overall its a damn good song, a hell of alot better than anything ive ever written or recorded.

Keep it up homes.

[mattinbeloit]

Ok here we go

Great guitar, well played written and recorded. You really have a nack for it.

I wish you would stop whine/whispering in your vocals. Your shit has so much potential to be absolutely mind blowingly amazing, its just held down by for vocals. Its not that they're bad note or timing wise, its just it sounds so breathy like you have no power behind them at all. Instead of singing in your headvoice, like you should be, you're just pushing your chest voice until it cant take it and it comes out all breathy.

Overall its a damn good song, a hell of alot better than anything ive ever written or recorded.

Keep it up homes.

Ya, I'm trying to get more power behind my voice, it's just naturally like that. A lot of it though is the fact that most of my recordings on here I record after I just wrote the song and I'm not used to singing it yet. I have to eat my words and just practice more, the big problem for me though I think is breath control. I can get power behind it if I try, but I have trouble doing that everytime I sing and I run out of breath easily. Another thing I do I think is I try too hard. I think its interesting you said it sounds like I'm pushing my chest voice. I need to not use as much of that, good point. Also, I have somewhat of a southern accent and I think I try to hide that a lot and it's just one more thing to think about when I sing.

[mangold]

Ok here we go

Great guitar, well played written and recorded. You really have a nack for it.

I wish you would stop whine/whispering in your vocals. Your shit has so much potential to be absolutely mind blowingly amazing, its just held down by for vocals. Its not that they're bad note or timing wise, its just it sounds so breathy like you have no power behind them at all. Instead of singing in your headvoice, like you should be, you're just pushing your chest voice until it cant take it and it comes out all breathy.

Overall its a damn good song, a hell of alot better than anything ive ever written or recorded.

Keep it up homes.

Ya, I'm trying to get more power behind my voice, it's just naturally like that. A lot of it though is the fact that most of my recordings on here I record after I just wrote the song and I'm not used to singing it yet. I have to eat my words and just practice more, the big problem for me though I think is breath control. I can get power behind it if I try, but I have trouble doing that everytime I sing and I run out of breath easily.

no
to be perfectly honest i dont think any of that is correct.
This is the problem i had for a long time, i has trying to push my chest voice and the results were horrible, much worse then yours. You have to find your head voice, and when you do your shit is going to rock.

to prove it to you, go outside and just yell as loud as you can at any pitch, i gurantee it doesnt sound breathy, thats your HEAD voice. You need to learn how to sing in that. I just did, now i have to learn how to control it.