Original Song "Paper Idols"

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Original Song "Paper Idols"

Unread post by Appfro » Sat Dec 25, 2004 3:49 pm

Time's coming to an end here and this deployment if anything else has helped my music. Good or bad, I've written like 10 songs here. Anyway, I wanted to share my latest one w/ you guys. So like it or hate it, here it is. PS...it's really sappy, it's called "Paper Idols" Let me know what ya think

right click save as
http://www.afbmthemovie.com/modules.php ... etit&lid=3

if that doesn't work, go to http://www.afbmthemovie.com/modules.php ... load&cid=2 and click on "Mitch Meadows - Paper Idols.mp3
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Unread post by freshead16 » Sat Dec 25, 2004 3:55 pm

wow! thats really good. i love the guitar work you did. keep up the good work. :D

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Unread post by onid41 » Sat Dec 25, 2004 3:55 pm

hey man....i really couldn't hear the lyrics sometimes you should post them because its a great song. The guitar playing was really really good and its a great sounding tune...awesome job soldier!
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Unread post by Appfro » Sat Dec 25, 2004 3:57 pm

Sorry, I have a hard time mixing my own stuff, I always put my vocals too low.

Paper Idols

Verse 1
The night before I left you
We held each other tight
And desperately we cried
That I didn’t have to go away

If there were a way to decide
What I dreamed at night
I’d spend every hour in your arms
Safe from loneliness

Pre-Chorus
And I don’t know how to say it to you
Like it’s never been said before
So despite my clichés
I swear that you are the only one I adore

Chorus
So I won’t compare my love for you
To the deepest ocean floor
And I won’t claim that a thousand men
Could never tear me away from you
But if I think of living without you I cry
I need you in my life and by my side
You are my love

Verse 2
It’s 12 o’clock in the morning
And I’m staring at a frozen
Piece of you
A moment caught in time

But paper doesn’t do you justice
And all I want is to hold your hand
To stroke your face to hear you laugh
Even if at me

Pre-Chorus
Chorus

Bridge
And pictures of your face
From 12,000 miles away
A paper idol or two
Are all I have left of you
God bring me back to her

Chorus

God bring me back to her
Oh please
Please bring me back to her
Oh Lord please hear my prayer
And bring me back to her

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Unread post by Tranman66 » Sat Dec 25, 2004 7:14 pm

wow the harmonics intro is amazing.

this is as good if not better than howie day.

great lyrics

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Unread post by stoca2 » Sat Dec 25, 2004 9:41 pm

this was really good lyrics were nice and the song is good too GOOD JOB

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Unread post by mangold » Sat Dec 25, 2004 10:24 pm

not bad, too much trebble and too repetitive. otherwise very good. keep at it and keep posting
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Unread post by Appfro » Mon Dec 27, 2004 8:25 am

thanks for the comments guys. andy, what do you mean by too much treble? i'm pretty new w/ the program i'm using (adobe audition) and i'm not sure i know how to add more bass to it w/o it sounding fake.

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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Mon Dec 27, 2004 11:21 am

My first impression was that it seemed a bit unoriginal. Too common of a progression. It just seemed like I had heard it all before. The harmonics in the beginning could either be calmed down a bit, or turned down some. The vocals could use a boost. The solo should probably be worked on. I don't know if you improvised that or whatever, but it might help if you plan out a small solo for that part. It just had no direction really.

My last one - It's too long! You could take out a verse or two for sure. It gets very repetitive.

BUT - You have a great voice, and you guitar skills are exceptionally good. Just work out some minor things and you should have a great song on your hands. :)
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Unread post by mangold » Mon Dec 27, 2004 11:29 am

Appsoldier wrote:thanks for the comments guys. andy, what do you mean by too much treble? i'm pretty new w/ the program i'm using (adobe audition) and i'm not sure i know how to add more bass to it w/o it sounding fake.
in the begginning the high trebble sounds good because you're picking alot. but when you start strummin the trebble almost takes over your voice. for the rythm sections it should be very little trebble. what kinda guitar u usin? if its got a preamp or its an elec you can adjust it on the guitar. if not im not sure how to do it in your program.
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Unread post by Swe dmbfan » Mon Dec 27, 2004 11:39 am

man i love the song,, good guitar to, try to sing up a little..

but the lyrics with the guitar was really sweet. i´m gonna listen to it again tonight.
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Unread post by SpoonInSpoon » Mon Dec 27, 2004 11:44 am

very nice! :thumbsup:

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Unread post by Appfro » Mon Dec 27, 2004 12:34 pm

dmbguitar718 wrote:My first impression was that it seemed a bit unoriginal. Too common of a progression. It just seemed like I had heard it all before. The harmonics in the beginning could either be calmed down a bit, or turned down some. The vocals could use a boost. The solo should probably be worked on. I don't know if you improvised that or whatever, but it might help if you plan out a small solo for that part. It just had no direction really.

My last one - It's too long! You could take out a verse or two for sure. It gets very repetitive.

BUT - You have a great voice, and you guitar skills are exceptionally good. Just work out some minor things and you should have a great song on your hands. :)
thanks man. i really don't go for the too common of a progression anymore. there are only 12 notes in a key and if you're going to play something in one key (as in this song you have to) there's no way to win the original progression battle...especially with this crowd (just talk to josh) :)
as far as the other stuff, yea, i really need to learn to mix, i suck something horrible at it. thanks for the advice on the solo, i'll work on that for sure, it was definetly ad lib and i'm not very good at it yet. and as for the length :( i have a problem i never want to end the song.
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Unread post by Appfro » Mon Dec 27, 2004 12:37 pm

praisedave wrote:
Appsoldier wrote:thanks for the comments guys. andy, what do you mean by too much treble? i'm pretty new w/ the program i'm using (adobe audition) and i'm not sure i know how to add more bass to it w/o it sounding fake.
in the begginning the high trebble sounds good because you're picking alot. but when you start strummin the trebble almost takes over your voice. for the rythm sections it should be very little trebble. what kinda guitar u usin? if its got a preamp or its an elec you can adjust it on the guitar. if not im not sure how to do it in your program.
i brought a 100 JB Player over here w/ me and i'm using a microphone that's connected to a set of headphones that are supposed to be used for talking on the phone. i have very limited resources. but rest assure i'll be getting a good mic and using my martin when i get back home. i just thought about it too, i had to do some noise reduction and that causes a lot of trebble i think. that could be where the problem is, you think?

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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Mon Dec 27, 2004 12:44 pm

Appsoldier wrote:
dmbguitar718 wrote:My first impression was that it seemed a bit unoriginal. Too common of a progression. It just seemed like I had heard it all before. The harmonics in the beginning could either be calmed down a bit, or turned down some. The vocals could use a boost. The solo should probably be worked on. I don't know if you improvised that or whatever, but it might help if you plan out a small solo for that part. It just had no direction really.

My last one - It's too long! You could take out a verse or two for sure. It gets very repetitive.

BUT - You have a great voice, and you guitar skills are exceptionally good. Just work out some minor things and you should have a great song on your hands. :)


thanks man. i really don't go for the too common of a progression anymore. there are only 12 notes in a key and if you're going to play something in one key (as in this song you have to) there's no way to win the original progression battle...especially with this crowd (just talk to josh) :)
as far as the other stuff, yea, i really need to learn to mix, i suck something horrible at it. thanks for the advice on the solo, i'll work on that for sure, it was definetly ad lib and i'm not very good at it yet. and as for the length :( i have a problem i never want to end the song.
Don't take that progression comment as a bad thing. That's just a personal thing that I noticed. You're right, you can't avoid that. About the solo...yeah, I'd suggest just sitting down and coming up with a lick or two that just fits it perfectly. It should sound a little cleaner. Try to make it so that someone would want to hum it after they hear it, you know?

I want to say again that you have a great voice and you're a very talented singer. Good job. :)
Pat McInnis

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