an original i guess

[seanbryantkbq]

well i didnt put it up on the site, and its not a band i play with anymore, but this is a song i wrote called bitter and its on this site: http://www.ryangartin.com/2hourstildawn

btw, the name of the band isnt two hours till dawn. we just dont have one.

also check out float on, our cover of modest mouse

im vocals and guitar. (sloppy on both, i know, but its my song, so o well)

the download is in the botton right corner


heres the lyrics to bitter:

Looking down upon it all
The earth it sits in beautiful ways
Saddened by this wasted place
All alone and lost in space

But here we sit 6 billion strong
And it seems we lost the days
Pulling puzzles all apart
And rearrange to fit our ways

Sad truth be told
The world has run her course
And withheld lies unfold
Turn to one another saying
Explain this
With our muddy hearts and bitter minds
Oh hold me down to the grain
And sing to my ears

Bitter bitter world
Bitter blue marble in only my skies
Bitter bitter world
And under the cold red sun we all die

The old man there
He sits
Shoes filled with nothing
One mile away
Millionaires they stay
So lovely
Lovely…

Sad truth be told
The world has run her course
And withheld lies unfold
Turn to one another saying
Explain this
With our muddy hearts and bitter minds
Oh hold me down to the grain
And sing to my ears

Bitter bitter world
Bitter blue marble in only my skies
Bitter bitter world
And under the cold red sun we all die

[Swe dmbfan]

i like the some of the lyrics,, good job!

[deceptivehero]

Thats a pretty cool song. Im sure once like you said you tighten it up it will be even better, I like your guitar in the chorus.

[seanbryantkbq]

thanks guys, check out float on too, its really cool song

[seanbryantkbq]

can some more people please critique?

[foxymophandlemama]

You've got some good lyrics going, but it seems like ur out of sync with the music... (or the other way round)... All in all its okay, but you should work on Strengthening ur voice and working with the music instead of against it.

[DMBFan63]

I liked the modest Mouse cover bro.. I'm not a modest mouse fan, but it really sounded a lot like the song

[dmb_tatertot]

i enjoyed it... i do agree that the timing was a little off but that comes with experience and practice.

[myxomatosis]

Nice job with Float On.. seemed a bit fast to me. I love the new Moddest Mouse cd, but Float on is probably my least favorite song on the cd. Still a good song

[katie]

you are a really talented lyricist! funky groove. bumbly moving along. you need to do breathing exercises to get umph behind your voice. It will still sound the same but it will allow you to hit the high notes more easy. deep breath through your lungs and into your diaphragm. your lower back needs to expand and then you know you are doing it right. this will give you more power behind the voice without distracting itself from the style you have created, which is neat!

there is a cool story under my site called the vinegar tasters, if you aren't familiar with it, take a read.

I contemplated bitter for quite some time within the last few years and I can't get away from this idea of bitter blame. that prolly doesn't make any sense, oh well. kind of like people that blame are bitter.

original style. look forward to check out more.

great av sean!!

[seanbryantkbq]

hey katie, i tooke lessons and forgot all the exercises. can u give me some more advice, or techniques you have found helpful. and thanks for liking my lyrics. just waht goes through my head somtimes

[Beauford33]

Sounds kinda like Song Along Song by the Blue Man Group. Pretty funky. My likey. Also kinda like Beck. Keep up the awsome work. I agree though, the "floating" of lyrics doesnt really fit the tight guitar riff.

[Easy E]

Your bass player is all over the place a bit, its not a bad song, just hard to get into because the beat isnt very solid and the vocals arent loud enough. Plus the bass is too heavy.